Topic sentence: Television can give bad influence to children.
Supporting sentence:
- Children will forget to study or do other things.
- Can cause many diseases such as gain weight.
- Can give bad influence.
- Change the children behavioral.
- Children will forget to study or do other things.
- Can cause many diseases such as gain weight.
- Can give bad influence.
- Change the children behavioral.
Concluding sentence: In conclusion, television is not entirely bad for children. Therefore, understanding the negative effects of it, parents should monitor and limit the amount of time spending on watching television.
Linkers/sequence
Connectors used: can, therefore, moreover, conclusion, also, such as, and.
Paragraph
Television can give bad influence to children. There are so many interesting television programs that it might be difficult for children to turn off the television after turning on it. Children might use all day to watch carton channel and they will forget to study or do another thing. It is very harmful for children if they spend most of the time on television. This can cause many diseases by watching television too much, such us gain weight because not enough do physical activities. Television also can give bad influence to children, for examples when they watch movie canton contains the element of violence, they will follow without think twice. Moreover, this kind of channel can impact to children behavioral. In conclusion, television is not entirely bad for children. Therefore, understanding the negative effects of it, parents should monitor and limit the amount of time spending on watching television.
This was very informative, I have also written something like this in my blog which is on effect of violence on TV on our minds.
ReplyDeletehttps://newfreeplace.blogspot.com/2018/06/effect-of-violence-and-horror-shown-on.html
It was a brief atempt on my side, not as good as yours but you could visit it and see my effort.
Overall, loved your post and way of writing